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wnemedineme69me
01-25-2004, 10:42 PM
I wrote this poem and was wanting some feedback...first time I've ever wrote one like this....

what I like about sex

if you ask me, I must confess, there's so many things I like about sex.
the one man I'll let have his way, must be really good at foreplay
I love the feel of skin on skin, the anticipation of it sliding in
the gentle kiss, tender caress, the feeling of his warm soft breath
the crumpled sheets, our bodies entwined, the weight of your body laying on mine
after we do that for awhile, you flip me over and go doggy style
you lean over so I can hear, your grunts and soft moans caressing my ear
just when I think I can't take anymore, you turn me on my side and off of all fours
our sweat mingling, bodies getting weak and then we fall into a heap
lying there basking in the afterglow, we don't say a word, but we both know
we may be tired and physically spent, but given the chance, we'd do it all over again

Lilith
01-26-2004, 12:26 AM
lovely.....being able to express yourself in writing is so cathartic.

Here is the link to Erotic Poetry (http://216.150.92.84/forums/showthread.php?s=&threadid=15778) that has been shared here.

exhib_it_all
01-26-2004, 01:35 AM
I agree with Lilith, expressing yourself with poetry is a gift many only wish they'd have.

exhib_it_all
01-26-2004, 01:36 AM
(and I forgot to say)
Good poem! Thanks!

LixyChick
01-26-2004, 07:27 AM
Oh...that's great! TY for sharing! Welcum to Pixies wnemedineme69me! Hope to read more and see you round the boards!

Passion Please
01-27-2004, 06:21 AM
Hi wnemedineme69me and big pixies welcome

Thanks for the poem, nicely written and well expressed, I can relate and feel all of those emotions as you express them.

I look forward to reading more from you in the future

kinx
01-28-2004, 02:20 PM
Fun poem. Let's throw in a chorus or two and make it a song!!!

Bilbo
01-28-2004, 02:34 PM
Originally posted by kinx
Fun poem. Let's throw in a chorus or two and make it a song!!!

Sounds like another Anthem request.

Must get aqua to make another sound file

pinkbutton
01-28-2004, 04:45 PM
Thats excellant. really good

dicksbro
01-28-2004, 06:23 PM
Very nice, wnemedineme69me. And welcome to Pixies. Hope you enjoy your stay! :)

SuzyQ
01-28-2004, 07:41 PM
Very nice,,captured the feeling of what I feel..and welcome hon...

wnemedineme69me
01-28-2004, 08:02 PM
Thank you everybody for the nice words about my poem....and if somebody makes a sound wav for it..I wanna hear it!!!!!!! :) if I had a mic, I would sing it, but I don't... :(