well i think the story seems awsome but a couple parts are unbelievable considerin in osme parts u call her ur sister and in some u call it ur cousin like in the title and u also stress it being so real it seems unreal and the simple fact that u put a needle throught a door wall border with a needle and oput the other side well still being able to see thorugh to see ur cousin especially usin a hammer seems unbelivable but the rest ios good just my 2 cents

(@editor's note: the story was edited for consistency on point mentioned above.@)